Solved Fixing My Resume
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Made some of the changes @scottalanmiller suggested. Keep the ideas coming!
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Looks way better already. Now to just trim enough to get it to fit.
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I selected to edit and it seems ot be working. Can you see the change to the top that I just made? A tiny bit of careful editing and removing one incorrect word that you had dropped in there and we trimmed a whole line!
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Changed "international" to "global" and trimmed another whole line.
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@scottalanmiller said:
Looks way better already. Now to just trim enough to get it to fit.
Ok, specific questions:
- My time at Staples where I did act as a supervisor feels like it's too light as far as the description.
- NTG experience: what to keep, what to drop, what to re-word?
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Staples would be expected to be very light.
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Watch for little things like capitalization mistakes (VMware not VMWare) and don't get names wrong (VMware vSphere not VMware Virtual vSphere.)
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@scottalanmiller said:
Staples would be expected to be very light.
Ok, Scott has done some work on the resume for me. It's been edited and is updated on the OneDrive.
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@scottalanmiller said:
Watch for little things like capitalization mistakes (VMware not VMWare) and don't get names wrong (VMware vSphere not VMware Virtual vSphere.)
Not sure why that was VMWare...I know better...
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Fix the alignment on the top most section. The carriage return is starting way too far to the right causing there to be unnecessary extra lines.
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This line bothers me:
Setup own website running Wordpress on LAMP server as a virtual machine on ESXi 5.1
It's too long and it has too much info and it is too wordy. I don't suggest not mentioning these things, but it is too much in general.
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Maybe condense to:
Implemented WordPress on LAMP server on ESXi.
Short and sweet. You don't mention WP or LAMP versions, why ESXi version?
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Turn: Setup and networked 2,700 laptops for Tableau conference in Las Vegas, NV
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@scottalanmiller said:
Maybe condense to:
Implemented WordPress on LAMP server on ESXi.
Short and sweet. You don't mention WP or LAMP versions, why ESXi version?
True. And okay, I like it.
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This bit is ridiculously large:
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Try this instead....
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No one cares about your CompTIA and putting in thrice is beyond obnoxious. Don't put it at all. The time of your certs is not very important either. Tell someone if they ask. And repeating CompTIA three times is a bit over the top.
And two whole lines for some courses at OCC is too much. And pointing out that it is a community college is not necessary, especially when it is part of SUNY.
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@thanksajdotcom said:
@scottalanmiller said:
Maybe condense to:
Implemented WordPress on LAMP server on ESXi.
Short and sweet. You don't mention WP or LAMP versions, why ESXi version?
True. And okay, I like it.
The word server might still be too much.
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Ok, the suggested changes have been made so far. Next?
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You use a lot of weird /. Stop that
